Sunday, August 19, 2007

Devil's Chronicles: Epiloque

The priest walked towards the confession booth. The mass was over and there were no worshippers in the pew.

The priest took his seat and closed the door. He flicked on the overhead dim light. He heard the door opening on the other side , followed by the faint click of the door closing. He heard the creak of the wooden kneeling board.

He heard the husky female voice, very breathy say :' Forgive me father, for you have sinned.'

He smiled at the mistake and opened the sliding window.

His smile froze on his face when he saw me.

I personally thought I was looking rather hot. My hair was brunette, wavy. My lips was painted red. I wore a simple black dress with a black lace shawl wrapped around my shoulder ,covering the curves of my ample breasts .After all, the place demanded a certain decorum.

'Its you,' he whispered, recoqnizing me ' and you are a woman'

'Yes' I sneered, my lips curling into a smile,' perhaps you would have preferred a nine year old altar boy?'

I watched the blood drain from his face.

I know a good soul when I see one.

I smiled.

Outside a storm was gathering.

14 comments:

Keshi said...

** know a good soul when I see one.

beautiful!

Keshi.

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Celestine said...

ryc: like you, im v much turned off by the idea of gurus. i think to follow someone and take one's word for fact without question is not truly being spiritual at all. however i enjoy listening to his thoughts and watching the way he carries himself. i do not know deepak chopra enough to say he's truly enlightened or anything, but so far his thoughts and words coincides with mine and i am happy to find a connection.

cheers

Adorable Pancreas said...

"Forgive me father, for you have sinned."

I just loved that bit.

Devil's Chronicles & Other Stories. Waiting for the others. :)

Tys on Ice said...

@keshi: thanks..iam glad u like it..

@celestine: he is ceratinly charsimatic

@AP : thanks for reading..the next one is based in kerala...totaly different genre...hope u will like that also...

Celestine said...

your story is simply excellent. i was spellbound throughout all 12 chapters...

i loved it.

tell me, what was the most important message in that piece of work?

The Grunt said...

Very interesting post, Ty.

Tys on Ice said...

@celestine: I was trying to convey that its all upto us in the end...everything else are crutches to be discarded after it serves its purpose...

@grunt : thanks...iam glad u liked it...

Adorable Pancreas said...

I'm waiting, tys ji. Where is it?

Peridot said...

My first time at your blog...it's different!

Ziah said...

Dear Tys,

As promised, read all the chapters and the epilogue in one go.. my words kinda died out on me. Its amazing how you've handled a heavy subject without over-doing it or the converse! Nice go! :)

Maya.. was more picturesque, vivid, even happier. The Devils Chronicles makes you think. I like your interpretation of the Devil. Not the standard cliched polarized baddie. But someone more meaningful. Loved them both Tys! So, whats next? :)

And ya, thanks a bunch for adding me to your blog roll.. :)

Ziah.

--xh-- said...

I did read all the chapters in one go... one of the best work I have come across in the blogworld... this one made me think a lot... you did the subject,plot and storyline full justice, and never went over board.
I am at loss of words to appreciate this story...
I visualized each and every scene and by the time I finished reading, my eyes where moistened. you are a master... do give us more...

--xh-- said...

This story needs to be printed...

rm said...

superb story, excellent treatment( forgive me these common words as my vocabulary is limited)orginal thoughts.

simply great.hope to see it on paperback and read it on reviews.